She stared at the creature in front of her. She realized she was rooted to the spot unable to move and simply staring into its eyes without blinking. It was reciprocating with a similar stare, as if playing bluff to see who moved first. A thousand thoughts raced through her head, can they smell fear? Was she close enough for it to smell her fear? She mentally reprimanded herself for drifting off topic instead of deciding how to approach the creature in front of her.
She was scared, that was for sure, petrified perhaps for the first time in her life. She should have known better then taking a walk in the dark in these parts which was the creature’s favorite haunt. She let out a sigh and shut her eyes for a brief instant before jolting them open. It was gone. She jumped up in lightening and went around in circles wondering if it was sneaking up from behind her. No, not behind her, suddenly she was going in more circles trying to see if it was exactly behind her and moving with her. No that wasn’t it either. She looked up before chiding herself, its not like the creature could fly or even climb trees. What was she thinking? She quickly consoled herself, fear makes a person go crazy, she was simply having a few irrational thoughts, it was allowed.
She turned around to spot a clear path between her and the house, quickly calculated the distance and the time it would take. She took a deep breath and decided it was time to make a run for it, and so she did. She ran like she hadn’t run in years. She ran like her life depended on it and it probably did, lest the creature apprehend her again.
“Dew, stop, DEW!!”
26 comments:
shudders in smiles :)
Keshi.
=) gd one but the sequence of suspense is becoming a bit monotonous...
bye tk cr
Ooh I loved this story!! I was completely riveted and felt your fear too, till I came to the ending. Well done! :)
Oh you beauty ! It was a classy one and I was wondering who that "Creature" was and why is it that most times in your "story line", the hard, fiendish creature are a "he" ?
Have a good weekend and tell ya what you got this uncanny knack to write a nice few paragraphs which keeps the reader enthralled and the plot riveting. Few people have that talent and few people have the talent to appreciate and I reckon I belong to the latter and I think you done good one more time :-)
interesting story , got me really scared and was happy in the end it was just a dog.very well written.have a good weekend.
Smiling at dogs help :D I've personally experienced that.
@ keshi & naren
thanks
@ sanjay
i really am scared of dogs
@ vik
no this time i made it a "it"
hehe but thanks
@ starry nights
thanks u enjoy the weekend too
@ john
i dunno.. i still think they are the enemy hehe
hahahaha I KNEW IT. LOL... i love dogs. i used to be scared. but i love them now... sooo cute
Nicely written. Good build up to the suspense and well executed. Never run from Dogs though.. Like you said, they can smell fear.
You are becoming quite a thrilling writer..
I am a fan... :)
Good story but somehow I knew it is going to be a dog. You know why? because I also think on the same lines. ;)
Narration is as always excellent.
heehee nice one...
can totally relate to it because im equally terrified of those lil mongrels :-/
Have a good trip and enjoy your break :-) Don't forget some nice gifts when you come back to Bombay :)
@ choco
i still fear them
@ ethan
i dont care if they smell my fear i am a sitting dog by sitting there.. i am running
@ cuckoo
finally someone who thinks like i do
@ pri
yay and some one else =)
@ vik
thanks
Loved it :)
@ ash
thanks
i love dogs.. dogs hate me.. check my blog for further details :P
am tellin u.. the stray fucks are surely conspiring against me.. everytime they see me they give me that "ah! there u go. we know you sucker. ur time will come" and then they give me that "killer" look! dogs i tell u.. loyally hate me!
Scared me....A mystifyingly beautiful blog. Pls do visit mine :)
lovely reading the story...It draws us still the very end...very nicely written!
"She" was Aditi. Chicken :)
Lovely narrative, like always! :-)
@ another brick
hilarious.. that is a lovely way of putting it...=)
@ a
thanks... =)
@ kalyan
thanks a lot
@ tintin
was it? now who knew?
@ supernova
thanks.. glad to see u back
lol!lol!
hahaha
classic piece..
i sense urpersonal experience in this...is it true
nice post....can u just blogroll me
i hav done it for u...
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Excellent post!
Aditi, all fine? Haven't heard from you in a while!
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