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Friday, October 19, 2007

Friday Word: Fear

She stared at the creature in front of her. She realized she was rooted to the spot unable to move and simply staring into its eyes without blinking. It was reciprocating with a similar stare, as if playing bluff to see who moved first. A thousand thoughts raced through her head, can they smell fear? Was she close enough for it to smell her fear? She mentally reprimanded herself for drifting off topic instead of deciding how to approach the creature in front of her.

She was scared, that was for sure, petrified perhaps for the first time in her life. She should have known better then taking a walk in the dark in these parts which was the creature’s favorite haunt. She let out a sigh and shut her eyes for a brief instant before jolting them open. It was gone. She jumped up in lightening and went around in circles wondering if it was sneaking up from behind her. No, not behind her, suddenly she was going in more circles trying to see if it was exactly behind her and moving with her. No that wasn’t it either. She looked up before chiding herself, its not like the creature could fly or even climb trees. What was she thinking? She quickly consoled herself, fear makes a person go crazy, she was simply having a few irrational thoughts, it was allowed.


She turned around to spot a clear path between her and the house, quickly calculated the distance and the time it would take. She took a deep breath and decided it was time to make a run for it, and so she did. She ran like she hadn’t run in years. She ran like her life depended on it and it probably did, lest the creature apprehend her again.

She heard a faint noise and turned just in time to see the creature gaining on her. His determined set of eyes instilled greater fear in her and she was suddenly afraid she wasn’t going to make it. She stumbled and fell and began mentally praying to God to forgive her for all her sins, asking for a chance to confess all her minor glibs to her parents etc when she heard a voice.

“Dew, stop, DEW!!”

She opened one eye hoping against hope, and saw the creature stopped merely inches away from her.

“Dew SIT”

It sat huffing and puffing, and then ambled towards her, causing her to squirm and began praying again. It licked her face. Now most would think a dog is showering the person with affection when it licks your face, she was one of those few who knew it was merely expressing regret at being unable bite and taste the person so was settling for a lick instead.

“Honestly, girl its only a dog. A pint sized dog at that, how can it possible scare you?”

She shrugged, mentally thanking her stars and guardian angels and everyone else in a speech that would possibly rival the longest of award function speeches for saving her that day and followed her savior into the house. She also conveniently agreed that since she had been given more time to live she should set right the minor glibs instead of confessing to them. That having been sorted, she happily followed her savior into the house

26 comments:

Keshi said...

shudders in smiles :)

Keshi.

naren_buddy said...

=) gd one but the sequence of suspense is becoming a bit monotonous...
bye tk cr

Sanjay said...

Ooh I loved this story!! I was completely riveted and felt your fear too, till I came to the ending. Well done! :)

Vik said...

Oh you beauty ! It was a classy one and I was wondering who that "Creature" was and why is it that most times in your "story line", the hard, fiendish creature are a "he" ?

Have a good weekend and tell ya what you got this uncanny knack to write a nice few paragraphs which keeps the reader enthralled and the plot riveting. Few people have that talent and few people have the talent to appreciate and I reckon I belong to the latter and I think you done good one more time :-)

starry nights said...

interesting story , got me really scared and was happy in the end it was just a dog.very well written.have a good weekend.

J said...

Smiling at dogs help :D I've personally experienced that.

Aditi said...

@ keshi & naren
thanks

@ sanjay
i really am scared of dogs

@ vik
no this time i made it a "it"
hehe but thanks

@ starry nights
thanks u enjoy the weekend too

@ john
i dunno.. i still think they are the enemy hehe

chocolteluva said...

hahahaha I KNEW IT. LOL... i love dogs. i used to be scared. but i love them now... sooo cute

Ethan said...

Nicely written. Good build up to the suspense and well executed. Never run from Dogs though.. Like you said, they can smell fear.

You are becoming quite a thrilling writer..

I am a fan... :)

Cuckoo said...

Good story but somehow I knew it is going to be a dog. You know why? because I also think on the same lines. ;)

Narration is as always excellent.

Pri said...

heehee nice one...
can totally relate to it because im equally terrified of those lil mongrels :-/

Vik said...

Have a good trip and enjoy your break :-) Don't forget some nice gifts when you come back to Bombay :)

Aditi said...

@ choco
i still fear them

@ ethan
i dont care if they smell my fear i am a sitting dog by sitting there.. i am running

@ cuckoo
finally someone who thinks like i do

@ pri
yay and some one else =)

@ vik
thanks

Ash said...

Loved it :)

Aditi said...

@ ash
thanks

another brick in the wall said...

i love dogs.. dogs hate me.. check my blog for further details :P

am tellin u.. the stray fucks are surely conspiring against me.. everytime they see me they give me that "ah! there u go. we know you sucker. ur time will come" and then they give me that "killer" look! dogs i tell u.. loyally hate me!

A said...

Scared me....A mystifyingly beautiful blog. Pls do visit mine :)

Kalyan said...

lovely reading the story...It draws us still the very end...very nicely written!

TinTin said...

"She" was Aditi. Chicken :)

supernova said...

Lovely narrative, like always! :-)

Aditi said...

@ another brick
hilarious.. that is a lovely way of putting it...=)

@ a
thanks... =)

@ kalyan
thanks a lot

@ tintin
was it? now who knew?

@ supernova
thanks.. glad to see u back

Abhishek Khanna said...

lol!lol!
hahaha
classic piece..

Entertainer said...

i sense urpersonal experience in this...is it true

surya said...

nice post....can u just blogroll me
i hav done it for u...

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GMG said...

Excellent post!

supernova said...

Aditi, all fine? Haven't heard from you in a while!